Tulunk Village

When i was landed in the Mikeye Lake i seen only Shin.
Shin - Bartek. We have a problem.
Me - I know. Where my brother.
Shin - He now been in local tample.
Me - Ok. Come shade. We must rescue Him.
Shin - I can go with you?
Me - Yes. Sure.
Shin - Ok. Take my number <I got Shin Number>
Me - Ok. Let's Go!
When I going throught tample i seen Chap.
Chap - Who i seen here. Bartek Książek. Chosen one from Earth.
Me - Where is my Brother?
Chap - Well..... He now been closed in cage.
Shade - Give him free!
Chap Take the Bloody Grail.
Chap - Never. Now welcome me. Domesday. New ruler of Earth!!!
He drunk demon blood from grail. He's body was changed.
Me - Never. You doesn't been ruler of Earth! GO SHIN! GO SHADE.
And the battle has begun. Shade kicked Domesday in his head. Domesday in angry used Ancient Power. Shade and Shin was paralyzed.
Me - NO!!!!!!!!!!
I jumped and cut him head using a sword. Domesday die!
Me - Huh. I did it!
I take keys to cage.
Patrick - Well.... You did it!. Oh. You have a T-Shoot.
Me - Yes. I found it in the Stormy Island.
Patrick - Now. You can been in the T-Midley!
Me - Well..... I don't want that.
Patrick - Why?
Me - Becouse E-Mons is my friend's. I don't want used that like Pokemon's. You don't understand. E-Mons have fellings like humans. They was crying, smiled, angried and they can speak like humans.
Patrick - But this is animals.
Me - No. E-Mons is doesn't been ANIMALS. They have a soul. Every one Electric Monster been friend.
Patrick - Meybe!
Patrick sit on the unparalyzed Shin and fly away.
Shade - Where we now fly?
Me - Fly to Palan City. I must seen Fakiake.

People, if you find this version hard to understand, please go to the new version of this story, I've found that almost NO ONE's read it, that makes me sad since I worked hard on it . Anyway Atecain, I'm done transferring the next part of the story from paper to the computer. I just need to correct the typos, and I want to add some more into it, you know, for making you wait so long.

Sonic_Girl wrote:I've found that almost NO ONE's read it, that makes me sad since I worked hard on it

I read it.

andwhyisit wrote:

Sonic_Girl wrote:I've found that almost NO ONE's read it, that makes me sad since I worked hard on it

I read it.

Thanks! It gets better, trust me.

When i land in Palan i go to Fakiake chamber.
I - Fakiake. I Kiled Domesday.
Fakiake - You did it! Well..... Come with me.
I go with Fakiake to Bozaru.
Fakiake - Hello Bozaru. This guy destroy Domesday.
I - I'm only.
Bozaru - Well..... You must been very strong.
I - Yea.
Bozaru gave me his Number
Bozaru - Take this number.
I - Thank's
Fakiake - Come to Antena Tree.
I go with Fakiake to Antena Tree.
Fakiake - This Antena Tree lead you to Liz Island.
I go throught tree.
I - <Look at Signal Bar> Shit! I don't have signal. But why?
Small flufy Denjuu come to me.
??? - Well..... Becouse Telephone Company was cut off the signal.
I - Holy Crap. What now i would doing? I knew <He change antena from him Phone and fill those Antena to D-Shoot><Signal in D-Shoot was back>
I - Huh..... I did it!

I - Now... What ypur name my fluffy friend?
Wattan - My name is Wattan. Nice too mett you.
I - Well..... I'm Bartek.
Wattan - I was lead you to the master BANGPALA.
I - Ok.
Wattan lead me to the Master Bangpala.